Rimu+story

__Thursday 16th June 2011__

Red= Changes I made Black= How it was

It’s Wilson! Lila yelled.

An over weight man who appears to be in his mid forties was just standing there smoking his cigarette, puffs of smoke billowing from his mouth and disappearing above his head, while a younger woman leaned on the stop and go sign, walkie talkie in hand, ready to direct traffic.

“Where to now Lila?” I asked, this was a time I needed her to step up and be her bossy self!

“My dog Wilson has gone missing” she said

My dog Wilson she said, he’s gone missing

“My dog Wilson” she said, he’s gone missing and I can’t find him anywhere.

Some words I changed:

scurried

but no luck. that appears to be , I was running shaven to

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